Comments on: Teaching a new blogger to blog http://www.zenfulcreations.com/wordpress/2008/12/09/teach-a-new-blogger-to-blog/ Zenful Creations Blog on CSS, Web Standards and the tranquility of design Thu, 19 Jan 2012 17:21:16 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Jeremy Conner http://www.zenfulcreations.com/wordpress/2008/12/09/teach-a-new-blogger-to-blog/comment-page-1/#comment-73186 Jeremy Conner Thu, 02 Apr 2009 15:25:46 +0000 http://www.zenfulcreations.com/wordpress/2008/12/09/teach-a-new-blogger-to-blog/#comment-73186 I know I'm a few months behind here, but I'm just now getting around to checking your blog Lori! I'm not a great writer or anything, as evidenced by my own sorry excuse for a blog, but I am an avid reader of just about anything and have done some writing before...so here are my two cents: I actually LOVE his title...I understand why you said it didn't "fit", but for me it's like a sucker punch - it leads you on a bit and then suddenly turns the tables on you. It's also a bit sarcastic I think...the blurb seems to talk about lowering gas prices, but yet what he hears is that "things are getting worse". I like this! I agree with you that putting some quotes in there from Obama, or perhaps linking to an article would have been a very nice touch here. It would have made his point more..."sharp"...and would have been impressive as well. Incidentally, I'd rather see quotes than a link - I shouldn't have to leave your article to go read up on another one, and then come back to your article to keep reading. Maybe quotes, and then at the bottom source it with the link so that people who doubt the veracity of the quotes or their context can look them up (context is EVERYTHING these days, people take so much stuff out of context to use it for their own good - I cannot stand when that happens, a pet peeve of mine!) He made his points nice and clear, and his writing style is better than most adults I know. I hate to sound patronizing, but as you said he really does have a gift. I'd read his blog if I had the address...and I'm pretty picky about what I spend time reading. Anyway, that's my feedback - hope you're doing well Lori! Jeremy Conner jeremyconner.blogspot.com I know I’m a few months behind here, but I’m just now getting around to checking your blog Lori!

I’m not a great writer or anything, as evidenced by my own sorry excuse for a blog, but I am an avid reader of just about anything and have done some writing before…so here are my two cents:

I actually LOVE his title…I understand why you said it didn’t “fit”, but for me it’s like a sucker punch – it leads you on a bit and then suddenly turns the tables on you. It’s also a bit sarcastic I think…the blurb seems to talk about lowering gas prices, but yet what he hears is that “things are getting worse”. I like this!

I agree with you that putting some quotes in there from Obama, or perhaps linking to an article would have been a very nice touch here. It would have made his point more…”sharp”…and would have been impressive as well. Incidentally, I’d rather see quotes than a link – I shouldn’t have to leave your article to go read up on another one, and then come back to your article to keep reading. Maybe quotes, and then at the bottom source it with the link so that people who doubt the veracity of the quotes or their context can look them up (context is EVERYTHING these days, people take so much stuff out of context to use it for their own good – I cannot stand when that happens, a pet peeve of mine!)

He made his points nice and clear, and his writing style is better than most adults I know. I hate to sound patronizing, but as you said he really does have a gift. I’d read his blog if I had the address…and I’m pretty picky about what I spend time reading.

Anyway, that’s my feedback – hope you’re doing well Lori!

Jeremy Conner
jeremyconner.blogspot.com

]]> By: Phyllis http://www.zenfulcreations.com/wordpress/2008/12/09/teach-a-new-blogger-to-blog/comment-page-1/#comment-73151 Phyllis Sun, 11 Jan 2009 21:50:37 +0000 http://www.zenfulcreations.com/wordpress/2008/12/09/teach-a-new-blogger-to-blog/#comment-73151 Mark's grammar is lacking in use and substance. His writing does not match the title assigned to him. His thoughts are mere surface thoughts reflected by the average American citizen. I saw not one original thought or expansion of ideas in this blog. This is a typical teenage blog of no subsequence to inform, educate or persuade the reader. Amazingly, he did not use curse words which detract from his message each time he uses them in his writing. I suggest a more complicated title that needs deep research such as "the effects of blogging in a teen society". Mark needs to use quotes properly, acknowledge his sources correctly, and double check spelling and grammar before hitting the submit button. The evidence of Mark’s neglecting his education are stellar in his blog post and will bleed into his ambition if not directly addressed with compassionate force and primal parenting. “A thing derided is a thing dead; a laughing man is stronger than a suffering man.” ~~Gustave Flaubert Mark’s grammar is lacking in use and substance. His writing does not match the title assigned to him. His thoughts are mere surface thoughts reflected by the average American citizen. I saw not one original thought or expansion of ideas in this blog. This is a typical teenage blog of no subsequence to inform, educate or persuade the reader. Amazingly, he did not use curse words which detract from his message each time he uses them in his writing. I suggest a more complicated title that needs deep research such as “the effects of blogging in a teen society”. Mark needs to use quotes properly, acknowledge his sources correctly, and double check spelling and grammar before hitting the submit button. The evidence of Mark’s neglecting his education are stellar in his blog post and will bleed into his ambition if not directly addressed with compassionate force and primal parenting.
“A thing derided is a thing dead; a laughing man is stronger than a suffering man.”
~~Gustave Flaubert

]]> By: Denny http://www.zenfulcreations.com/wordpress/2008/12/09/teach-a-new-blogger-to-blog/comment-page-1/#comment-72706 Denny Wed, 10 Dec 2008 01:17:21 +0000 http://www.zenfulcreations.com/wordpress/2008/12/09/teach-a-new-blogger-to-blog/#comment-72706 Although not really one to "critique", I would like to say that I agree that Mark has great potential with his writing and good ability to covey what he wants to get across in print. The blog on the economy hits home... also my pocket. I believe the economy will recover based on a conglomerate of people joining together to have faith and support for these United States.... it is confidence that makes the market. The influence of one can change many. Please do not let people sway you to believe in the glum and doom of a faltering status when all you have to do is believe in our American way and the wonderful potential of "Compassionate Capitalism" !! Although not really one to “critique”, I would like to say that I agree that Mark has great potential with his writing and good ability to covey what he wants to get across in print.

The blog on the economy hits home… also my pocket. I believe the economy will recover based on a conglomerate of people joining together to have faith and support for these United States…. it is confidence that makes the market. The influence of one can change many. Please do not let people sway you to believe in the glum and doom of a faltering status when all you have to do is believe in our American way and the wonderful potential of “Compassionate Capitalism” !!

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